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i.

I have a bouquet of light
cliques
of shattered sunrays
that shun those
whose rose is not as rubicund
or whose cerulean is only slightly sea-green-stained.

Slice up the white
and imprison it in sardine cans
syringes
and push the plungers home.

But no matter how much you may try
the result is death;
for you've frayed the perfect threads
beyond repair
And only dried minerals and plasma
some darker version of the cosmic latte concentrated.

ii.

My heart is a prism.
All that's around me
is cold
and bleak
some hibernating humming
frozen beneath the winter's coat.

And inside,
I must be a time machine,
because I cannot abide this monochrome much longer.
And I've sprung forward to spring.

I'm seizing the icicles
that drip from the pallid clouds
and stripping them
and cutting them
and setting them

and in my heart they are transcribed
and flowers bloom
in the rumination of the sunlight.

I'm bursting;
a host to the aquatic fermentation
and I sip this bouquet
an imitation of the future,
slipping into some trip
where colors regurgitated on paper
turn into white.

iii.
i am the equinox.
i have no idea.

i'm just all in a creative mood today.  i fear that i may start drawing this picture i've been putting off because its subject material is somewhat questionable but..... it's what i feel.

i really need to study for my microbiology midterm on thursday.

i put this in nature because i honestly have no idea what this is.

20 minutes. unedited.

EDIT: A GINORMOUS THANK YOU!!!! to :icondanielleivanova: for suggesting this and to :icongrimface242: for featuring it!!! go check out the former's amazing piece inspired by this poem --> danielleivanova.deviantart.com… :love:
Also, a huge general BEHOLD MY GRATITUDE!!! to everyone who faved this or other things or watched or gave llamas within the past 24 hours! i wish i had the time to sort out who did what and go post messages on each and every one of your profiles, but alas, a grad student's life is never not busy ^^;
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Given 2014-04-12
Rainbow by stargirl2791 ( Suggested by DanielleIvanova and Featured by inknalcohol )
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LeftUnfinished Featured By Owner Oct 29, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Very nice work here. :heart:
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stargirl2791 Featured By Owner Oct 29, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
thank you! :love:
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dragonflame45 Featured By Owner Apr 13, 2014
i dont really get it, mind explaining :L?
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stargirl2791 Featured By Owner Apr 13, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Well, like all poetry, the meaning is open to interpretation by the reader.

However, when I was writing it, there were three things on my mind.  Firstly, I was staring down at a bunch of sharpies I was organizing.  I'm a very science-minded individual and that may account for some of the light- and color-related metaphors that wove their way into the poem.  Secondly, it was winter still when I wrote this and I was getting tired of the endless snow and ice and lack of color and life.  And thirdly, I was talking to my friend (who became my boyfriend four days later) and I think some of the inspiration draws from the (at that point) suppressed feelings for him.
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dragonflame45 Featured By Owner Apr 14, 2014
oh okay thanks :D i know poetry is  up to interpretation and all but i wasn't interpreting much because well I'm me... :l.but thanks for replying  i kind of get it  now :)
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stargirl2791 Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
:)
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TheGalleryOfEve Featured By Owner Apr 12, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Congratulations on your well-deserved DD!!! :iconflyingheartsplz::iconlainloveplz::iconflyingheartsplz: :clap::clap::clap:
I’m very happy for you!!! :iconloveloveplz: :tighthug:
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stargirl2791 Featured By Owner Apr 13, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
thank you so much! :love:
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TheGalleryOfEve Featured By Owner Apr 13, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
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hopeburnsblue Featured By Owner Apr 12, 2014  Professional Writer
This is absolutely beautiful!
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stargirl2791 Featured By Owner Apr 13, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
thank you so much!! :)
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DanielleIvanova Featured By Owner Apr 12, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
OMAHGOD CONGRATULATIONS! I have to say I don't remember feeling so excited about one of my suggestions getting featured. I wish I could write it on a flag and wave it for the entire world to see! :love:
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stargirl2791 Featured By Owner Apr 12, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
HOLY SHIT THANK YOU!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
(EXCUSE MY EXPLETIVE! I'M LJLASDKJFKLASDJFSALKDAJSLK
OH MY GOSH I'M SO GRATEFUL I CAN'T EVEN THINK OH MY GOSH!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!)
LIKE
OH MY GOSH
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DanielleIvanova Featured By Owner Apr 12, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
:w00t: I'm so pleased that you're happy! I was so passionate about this poem and about your work altogether so even if it hadn't been accepted I'd have kept trying with your next poems. Take pride in your work, girl, your style is indeed something to appreciate and keep an eye out for. 
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stargirl2791 Featured By Owner Apr 13, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
oh gosh thank you!!! :iconblushplz:
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TerramArmsXIII Featured By Owner Apr 12, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
hmm, nice!! And great job!
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stargirl2791 Featured By Owner Apr 13, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
thank you so much!!
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TerramArmsXIII Featured By Owner Apr 13, 2014  Hobbyist Writer

Np, would you like to read a new poem I made?

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stargirl2791 Featured By Owner Apr 13, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
perhaps
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TerramArmsXIII Featured By Owner Apr 13, 2014  Hobbyist Writer

arcnovaxiii.deviantart.com/art…

thank you, if yah decide to

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PaleAuthor Featured By Owner Apr 12, 2014  Student Writer
Ooh a poem on DD. I wish one day on of my poems will be too there~
This is really good and I love this whole style. I have once seen it before. I don't use it myself, but it's still cool La la la la :happybounce: 
I love every word of this and especially the way how fluid it sounds in my head while I read. You're amazing and can use words very well :D
Keep it up!
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stargirl2791 Featured By Owner Apr 13, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
do you mean the numbering?
thank you so much for your comment! :happybounce: 
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PaleAuthor Featured By Owner Apr 13, 2014  Student Writer
Yes the i. and ii. and so on :) And you're welcome! La la la la 
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stargirl2791 Featured By Owner Apr 13, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
yeah i'd never used it before myself, either, but this one seemed to need it. i saw it in the works of another poet i follow :)
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DanielleIvanova Featured By Owner Mar 6, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
I'm a little hesitant to comment on this because the emotion it evokes is so profound and overwhelming, I'm afraid if I start talking about it it will spill over in a most uncontrolable fashion. There are three aspects of it that struck me so greatly: first, how much I can relate to it, seeing that my window is all white and grey and I also yearn for the warmth and colors of spring, you definitely rekindled that need in me with incredile power; second, how absolutely beautiful it is, and I cannot stress this enough - the images you paint are so aesthetic and appealing I cannot help but feel a need to paint them; and third, how melodically it sounds. You know I'm a fan of rhyme and rhythm so I've trained myself to seek it everywhere and I don't know if it's on purpose or not but I loved the places where you inserted little rhymes, a few repeated letters here and there ( like 'plasma', šosmic', 'prism' for e.g.). All in all, this is a surprisingly emotional poem for its theme, the feeling of longing definitely comes across nicely. I have to also thank you for adding a few new words to my vocabulary :D Not being a native speaker, I had some trouble with it at first, but when I was able to grasp its full meaning, I felt a sense of fulfillment and delight that is hard to describe. Would you mind if I paint a little picture from the first stanza? I can see it so clearly in my head, and it's irresistable.
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stargirl2791 Featured By Owner Mar 6, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
the really funny thing about your comment about how emotional this is....
it was inspired by markers and microbiology. the subject matter is even more mundane than it appears to be at first glance, haha!
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DanielleIvanova Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Well, the emotion it evoked in me was quite strong and lasting. And you know what - I don't care how mundane your inspiration was! Not at all! It produced something that touched me so deeply, it hardly matters. 
I'm working on the painting right now :P
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stargirl2791 Featured By Owner Mar 30, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
actually, now that i look back on it (funny how a poem's meaning can sometimes change depending on context or what's going on or the length of thinking about it) this was somewhat inspired by my (at the time) not-yet-boyfriend; that i couldn't keep holding back my feelings for much longer.  it turns out, i was right!
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DanielleIvanova Featured By Owner Apr 2, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
:giggle: Oh boy! That definitely changes my view of the poem! I will try to hold on to the first one until I finish this thing because it totally looks out of place now :noes:  I'm so happy "spring" came for you, though :P
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stargirl2791 Featured By Owner Apr 2, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
the thing is, i think you're right on the money though too... like romantic feelings are like a light you're holding inside of you. :)
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DanielleIvanova Featured By Owner Apr 6, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
INdeed they are. The thought of your loved one can brighten up every bad day. :)
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stargirl2791 Featured By Owner Mar 6, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
wow, thanks!!!! again, i didn't even realize the repeated letters and stuff!
these comments really mean so much to me... to hear what my poems evoke in other brains... :D

and i'd be honored if you painted something!!! :D
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DanielleIvanova Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
danielleivanova.deviantart.com… Work of progress of it. DUnno if I will be able to work on it during the week and my enthusiasm wouldn't let me wait, sooo... :D
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stargirl2791 Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
oh my gosh thank you for the complement of drawing my work!
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stargirl2791 Featured By Owner Apr 12, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
*compliment ^^;
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DanielleIvanova Featured By Owner Mar 11, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
It's been an enormous pleasure for me to have a chance to experience your poem again in such a way.
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stargirl2791 Featured By Owner Mar 11, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
:love:
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Black-White-10 Featured By Owner Mar 3, 2014  Student Writer
:O i love when people depict colors :3 its nice, love it. :3
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stargirl2791 Featured By Owner Mar 4, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
thank you so much! :D
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Black-White-10 Featured By Owner Mar 4, 2014  Student Writer
Your welcome :33 :D
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